Target audience feed back

We as a group managed to upload our video's on top some social networking sites such as; Twitter, Facebook and You tube as well as broadcasting the URL on BBM( blackberry messenger )- this is so we can get views and opinions about what we should change about our video, what went well and what they didn't like about the video.
   The reviews that we got back from my Facebook page about our film was;

So as a whole it looks like we really hit it off , but we also had some verbal feedback form our target audience saying that ' the phone ringing bit was far too long and they just ended the film there because they got really bored of watching the phone just ring. So in addition to these comments we managed to change parts of the film opening that people found a bit boring.

    The bits that we changed from this film http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=EwLWZoGOJUo to this film http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=2aeLpo4XhxU was;

• We split up the phone ringing clip with other clips of the girl looking at her phone and trying to call some one.
• We split up the establishing shot at the beginning and added in more titles.
• We also removed some of the clips added in some transitions and changed the contrast and speed on some of the clips.